I absolutely loved the opening of this story. It drew me in right away, and the language was lovely and poetic.
I did find the italicised section to be a little stilted (particularly the hag's dialogue); when you're describing things, it's great, but I feel the prose there doesn't quite live up to the beautifully strong beginning.
I, like many other people, would like to know what happened between the hag and the woman with the bagels -- I was very intrigued by this! I hope we get to see this expanded soon. :)
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Date: 2011-04-27 04:28 pm (UTC)I did find the italicised section to be a little stilted (particularly the hag's dialogue); when you're describing things, it's great, but I feel the prose there doesn't quite live up to the beautifully strong beginning.
I, like many other people, would like to know what happened between the hag and the woman with the bagels -- I was very intrigued by this! I hope we get to see this expanded soon. :)